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Do you think getting old is a good thing or a bad thing? Explain your answer.

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I think getting old is just a natural thing that we need to accept.
If we don't get old, then we need to live forever even tough out love ones are dead.
And if we live forever, then it will be so boring and we will lose the meaning of our lives.
Because of these reasons, I think getting old is just a natural thing that we have to accept.
So I will get old even tough I have a chance to live forever without getting old.

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Hi John!  

Getting old is the only inevitable thing in this world. It's irreversible. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think getting old is just a natural thing that we need to accept.
>>CORRECT

If we don't get old, then we need to live forever even tough out love ones are dead.
>> If we don't get old, then we need to live forever even though our loved ones are already dead. 

And if we live forever, then it will be so boring and we will lose the meaning of our lives.
>>CORRECT

Because of these reasons, I think getting old is just a natural thing that we have to accept.
>>CORRECT

So I will get old even tough I have a chance to live forever without getting old.
> > CORRECT
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