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My favorite place in my city is my home! because i am lazy to go out so i almost stay at home. while i am home i can study,play phone,eat some foods etc, i can do many kinds of things. and these days going out is little bit dangerous because of pandemic. so i think my favorite place in my city is my home.

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Hi Chloe!  

Yes, there is no place like home. We can be ourselves when we are at our house. We are also be surrounded by that people that we love. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

My favorite place in my city is my home! because i am lazy to go out so i almost stay at home. 
>> My favorite place in my city is my home because I am lazy to go out. I usually just stay at home.. 

while i am home i can study,play phone,eat some foods etc, i can do many kinds of things. 
>> When I am home, I can play, study, use my phone and eat some food. I can do many things here. 

and these days going out is little bit dangerous because of pandemic. so i think my favorite place in my city is my home.
>> And these days, going out is a little bit dangerous because of the pandemic so I think that my favorite place in my city is my home. 
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