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What do you think about the dutch treat?

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What do you think about the dutch treat?

I am agree for dutch treat.
We relieves the burden each other If you have to pay for the meal.



My diary
June 18, 2022

I was feeling good (a good mood) good last weekend
beause I was able to see my friends for the first time after firscoivde-19.
so I took a bus to Suwon station to go to the place we promised.
when we met we greeted each other at the cafe.
There were so noise and confusing with so many people.
We moved the restaurant we reserved as soon as we drank coffee.
The restaurant was 2nd floor in buliding.
When we arrived there we ordered a set menu and enjoyed eating them.
After dinner we moved taro café. There is 3rd flood in same building.
We are able to see tarot and fortune telling.
I was interest in it with my friend so we get my fotune from her.
I told her the day and time I was born.
After, she told me about my personality and what I do.
I am very conservative and a trusted person.
I was full of stress and in trouble w

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Good day Julia,
Thank you for writing down your thoughts. I provided some correction on your sentence to improve your writing. Verbally practice them for your skill's development.
Have an awesome day!
Aki~

I am agree for dutch treat.
>>> I agree with the Dutch treat.
We relieves the burden each other If you have to pay for the meal.
>>> We relieve the burden of each other If you have to pay for the meal.


My diary
June 18, 2022

I was feeling good (a good mood) good last weekend beause I was able to see my friends for the first time after firscoivde-19.
>>> I was feeling well last weekend because I was able to see my friends for the first time after the Covid19 outbreak.
>>> I was in a good mood last weekend because I was able to see my friends for the first time after the Covid19 outbreak.
so I took a bus to Suwon station to go to the place we promised.
>>> so I took the bus to Suwon station and went to the place where we promised to meet.
>>> so I took the bus to Suwon station and went to our meeting place.
when we met we greeted each other at the cafe.
>>> CORRECT!
There were so noise and confusing with so many people.
>>> There were so much noise and confusion because of so many people.
We moved the restaurant we reserved as soon as we drank coffee.
>>>  We went to the restaurant we had reserved as soon as we drank coffee.
The restaurant was 2nd floor in buliding.
>>> The restaurant was on the 2nd floor of the building.
When we arrived there we ordered a set menu and enjoyed eating them.
>>> Upon arriving we ordered a set menu and enjoyed the food.
After dinner we moved taro café. There is 3rd flood in same building.
>>> After dinner, we moved to a taro cafe which is on the 3rd floor of the same building.
We are able to see tarot and fortune-telling.
>>> CORRECT!
I was interest in it with my friend so we get my fotune from her.
>>> I was interested in it with my friend so we asked our fortune from her.
>>> My friend and I were interested in it so we asked for our fortune from her.
I told her the day and time I was born.
>>> CORRECT!
After, she told me about my personality and what I do.
>>> CORRECT!
I am very conservative and a trusted person.
>>> CORRECT!
I was full of stress and in trouble.
>>> CORRECT!
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