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What holiday do you think should be removed from your country and why?

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well I don't know about the holidays. it never concerns my work. the national holidays are not for me. on that holidays, I should work harder for incoming people. since I worked for food and beverage industry, I have never got a rest on those days. but I don't blame on the work. it is my choice so and I don't want to go to a place fully filled up by people. I don't like be at a crowd space. I much prefer to be in a quiet place or at home. so, for me, it doesn't matter if we remove all the holidays(maybe I want to). anyhow I will be in the brewery or the pub so.

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Hi Lim!  

You and my husband have the same thinking since both of you are in the food and beverage industry. You guys never really get the chance to enjoy these days. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.


well I don't know about the holidays. 
>> Well, I don't know a lot about holidays. 

it never concerns my work.
>> It never concerns my work.

the national holidays are not for me. 
>> The national holidays are not for me. 

on that holidays, I should work harder for incoming people. 
>> On holidays, I should work harder for  incoming people. 

since I worked for food and beverage industry, I have never got a rest on those days. 
>> Since I work for the food and beverage industry, I never rest on those days. 

but I don't blame on the work. 
>> But I don't blame my work. 

it is my choice so and I don't want to go to a place fully filled up by people. 
>> It is my choice so and I don't want to go to a place that is filled up by people. 

I don't like be at a crowd space. 
>> I don't like being in crowded places. 

I much prefer to be in a quiet place or at home. 
>> I prefer to be in a quiet place or at home. 

so, for me, it doesn't matter if we remove all the holidays(maybe I want to). 
>> So for me, it doesn't matter if we remove all the holidays. 

anyhow I will be in the brewery or the pub so.
>> Anyhow, I will be in the brewery or the pub. 

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