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In my company, there are many divisions, like infrastructure, building, housing, energy, etc.
Among the divisions. Housing division is now contributing to the growth of company, because the incomes from domestic housing business is very big.
However, the incomes from my division, infrastructure, is very small. So I'm very disappointed about this situation.
I wish that my division lead the growth of company someday.

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Hello, Chris!
Thank you for sending me your homework. I know that you're doing your best to perform well in your company. Challenge yourself to do better each time, and to improve yourself with each step. Your goals will be met if you put out your best effort. ^^
Have a great night, and see you on Wednesday. 
~Teacher ERIN

In my company, there are many divisions, like infrastructure, building, housing, energy, etc. among the divisions.
>>In my company, we are divided into different divisions. Like infrastructure, building, housing, energy, etc.

Housing division is now contributing to the growth of company, 
>>The housing division is now contributing to the growth of our company.

because the incomes from domestic housing business is very big.
>>Because the income from domestic housing is high.

However, the incomes from my division, infrastructure, is very small. 
>>However, from the infrastructure division the income is low.

So I'm very disappointed about this situation.
>>CORRECT

I wish that my division lead the growth of company someday.
>>I hope my division will lead the growth of our company someday.
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