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What is your dream house and where do you want it to be

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this would be in one of Northern Europe countries have a lake or the beach where I can see the white peak mountain over the lake or the beach. the house is made by wooden material. even when the science developed far beyond than now, I will take the house and life enjoy with the Mother Nature.

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Hi Lim!  

That sounds like serenity. That would be absolutely perfect. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

this would be in one of Northern Europe countries have a lake or the beach where I can see the white peak mountain over the lake or the beach. 
>> This would be one of the Northern European countries that have lakes or beaches where I can see a white peak mountain. 

the house is made by wooden material.
>> My dream house would be made of wooden materials. 

even when the science developed far beyond than now, I will take the house and life enjoy with the Mother Nature.
>> Even if technology is developed far beyond than now, I will still choose this kind of house and life to enjoy mother nature. 
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