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What is your dream house and where do you want it to be

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this would be in one of Northern Europe countries have a lake or the beach where I can see the white peak mountain over the lake or the beach. the house is made by wooden material. even when the science developed far beyond than now, I will take the house and life enjoy with the Mother Nature.

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Hi Lim!  

That sounds like serenity. That would be absolutely perfect. 

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this would be in one of Northern Europe countries have a lake or the beach where I can see the white peak mountain over the lake or the beach. 
>> This would be one of the Northern European countries that have lakes or beaches where I can see a white peak mountain. 

the house is made by wooden material.
>> My dream house would be made of wooden materials. 

even when the science developed far beyond than now, I will take the house and life enjoy with the Mother Nature.
>> Even if technology is developed far beyond than now, I will still choose this kind of house and life to enjoy mother nature. 
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