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I think every holiday is helpful for everyone because we take a rest on that day. So, there is no holiday should be removed.

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Hi Kane!  

Yes, there is always a history in all holidays. It gives us the opportunity to do what they want. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think every holiday is helpful for everyone because we take a rest on that day. 
>> I think every holiday is helpful for everyone because we can take a rest on those days. 

So, there is no holiday should be removed.
>> So, there should be no holidays removed. 
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