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Why do you think former president Moon Jae-in’s nuclear phase-out policy was a failure?

작성자: 황*하
2022-06-17 947

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Ex-president admistration would like to use green energy such as water, wind and solar power instead of nuclear power due to the unexpected accident. Nuclear phase-out policy was the the main pledge at the presidential election in 2017. Moon announced that he would not install new nuclear power plants and would not extend the lifespans of existing ones. However, Korea doesn't have underground energy resources such as oil and coal. Renewable energy is not very efficient. Wind porwer is weak and solar power generation is available only during the day. They can't compete with nuclear energy in efficiency. The energy prices are skyrocketing nowadays due to the war between Ukline and Russia and economic crisis. There is only one accident cause by nuclear palnts in Chernobyl. I think we have managed this facilitis very well and are skilled enough. So it is one of the important sources to provide electricities with cheep price. I believe it is ok to operate nuclear plants in my country.

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Ex-president admistration would like to use green energy such as water, wind and solar power instead of nuclear power due to the unexpected accident. 
>> The ex-president's admistration would like to use green energy such as water, wind and solar power instead of nuclear power due to the unexpected accident. 
OR >> The previous admistration would like to use green energy such as water, wind and solar power instead of nuclear power due to the unexpected accident. 
Nuclear phase-out policy was the the main pledge at the presidential election in 2017. 
>> CORRECT!
Moon announced that he would not install new nuclear power plants and would not extend the lifespans of existing ones. 
>> CORRECT!
However, Korea doesn't have underground energy resources such as oil and coal. 
>> CORRECT!
Renewable energy is not very efficient. 
>> CORRECT!
Wind porwer is weak and solar power generation is available only during the day. 
>> Wind power is weak, and solar power generation is available only during the day. 
They can't compete with nuclear energy in efficiency. 
>> CORRECT!
The energy prices are skyrocketing nowadays due to the war between Ukline and Russia and economic crisis. 
>> The energy prices are skyrocketing nowadays due to the war between Ukraine and Russia, and the economic crisis we are all facing. 
There is only one accident cause by nuclear palnts in Chernobyl. 
>> There is only one accident caused by the nuclear plants in Chernobyl. 
I think we have managed this facilitis very well and are skilled enough. 
>> I think we have managed this facilities very well and are skilled enough. 
So it is one of the important sources to provide electricities with cheep price. 
>> So it is one of the important sources to provide electricity with cheap price. 
OR >>  So it is one of the important sources to provide electricity sources with cheap price. 
I believe it is ok to operate nuclear plants in my country.
>> CORRECT!
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