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Do you still believe in traditional medicines? Why or why not?

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I don't believe in traditional medicines anymore.
First, there is no any scientific grounds in traditional medicines.
They are just talking about their effects with no any grounds for it.
Second, I've never experienced the effects of traditional medicines.
Because of these reasons, I don't believe it anymore and I will.

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Hi John!  

We have the same opinion. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't believe in traditional medicines anymore.
>> CORRECT

First, there is no any scientific grounds in traditional medicines.
>> First, there are no any scientific grounds in traditional medicines.

They are just talking about their effects with no any grounds for it.
>> CORRECT

Second, I've never experienced the effects of traditional medicines.
>> CORRECT

Because of these reasons, I don't believe it anymore and I will.
>>Because of these reasons, I don't believe in it. 

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