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Inner beauty and outer beauty are different. We can see easily outer beauty but we cannot know fast that person¡¯s beauty. We can see outer beauty if we meet first. But we can see their inner beauty when we meet that person many times. Also, I think the most beautiful person in my life is my friend. We met when we are 10years old. We are friend until now. She has inner beauty and outer beauty, too. She is so kind to everyone and when she meet me, she always welcome me. I think we are very nice friend to each other.

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Hi Bella!
These are really good ideas.
You amaze me every day.
Keep up the good work!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Inner beauty and outer beauty are different. 
>> Correct
We can see easily outer beauty but we cannot know fast that person¡¯s beauty. 
>> We can easily see outer beauty but we cannot immediately know a person's inner beauty.
We can see outer beauty if we meet first. 
>> We can see the outer beauty when we meet people for the first time.
But we can see their inner beauty when we meet that person many times. 
>> However, we can see their inner beauty after we have met that person many times. 
Also, I think the most beautiful person in my life is my friend. 
>> Correct
We met when we are 10years old. 
>> We met when we were 10 years old. 
We are friend until now. 
>> We are friend until now. 
She has inner beauty and outer beauty, too. 
>> Correct
She is so kind to everyone and when she meet me, she always welcome me. 
>> She is so kind to everyone and when she meets me, she always greets me. 
I think we are very nice friend to each other.
>> I think we are very good friends.
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