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We have eating customs. First thing is the oldest person eat food first. In Korea, manners are very important. Therefore the oldest person eat first, then other people eat foods. Second thing is we shouldn't make sound while we eating. It is hard to say custom, but it is important in Korea. Manners are very important in Korea. If you eat food and make sounds, most people think it is too dirty and feel inconvenient.

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Hi Bella!
The correct terms are important here.
They could be used to express the exact meaning of your thoughts. 
Read them over and practice them.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
We have eating customs. 
>> Correct
First thing is the oldest person eat food first.
>> First thing is that the oldest person would start eating first.
In Korea, manners are very important. 
>> Correct
Therefore the oldest person eat first, then other people eat foods. 
>> Therefore, the oldest person eats first, then other people can follow.
Second thing is we shouldn't make sound while we eating. 
>> Second thing is that we shouldn't make sound while we are eating. 
It is hard to say custom, but it is important in Korea. 
>> It is a hard custom to follow, but it is important in Korea. 
Manners are very important in Korea. 
>> Correct
If you eat food and make sounds, most people think it is too dirty and feel inconvenient.
>> If you eat food and make sounds, most people think it is too dirty and they would feel uncomfortable. 
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