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Is it important to have hobbies? Why/why not?

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I think that I should to have hobbies, because the hobby can give me some energy and health of both body and spirit.
Also, many people can get stress to work and the stress will give them some bad efects. The hobby can help to release stress.
So, I think that the hobby is necessary to ours.

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Hello Simon. Thank you for sending me your homework. I agree with you that a hobby is important to people. We should continue doing what we love. ~T. Lyn
I think that I should to have hobbies, because the hobby can give me some energy and health of both body and spirit.
>>I think that I should have hobbies because doing activities can give me some energy and health for both my body and spirit.
Also, many people can get stress to work and the stress will give them some bad efects. 
>>Also, many people are stressed because of working and that stress will give them some bad effects.
The hobby can help to release stress.
>>Hobby helps and allows us to release stress.
So, I think that hobby is necessary to ours.
>>Therefore, I think that hobby is necessary for us.

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