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What is your dream house and where do you want it to be?

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My dream house is having a yard and a basketball post. And the place is Incheon. Because Incheon is near the international airport. Especially, Songdo of Incheon is called by city of the future. So I want to live there and make a living.

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Hi Elic!  

Yes, everything needs to be suitable in terms of your living conditions. We have to think about our jobs as well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My dream house is having a yard and a basketball post.
>> My dream house has a yard and a basketball post in it. 

And the place is Incheon. Because Incheon is near the international airport. 
>> That place should be in Incheon because it is near the international airport. 

Especially, Songdo of Incheon is called by city of the future. 
>> Especially, it is called the "Songdo of Incheon" or "City of the future" so I want to live there and make a living.

So I want to live there and make a living.
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