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In the lack I watched on YouTube, the newlywed bride have to cry a lot before the eve of her wedding. It originates from the newlywed bride who would marry with her lover. But the king who allows their wedding asked the newlywed bride for a bed with him. She understandably cried so much that her face would be swollen. Also the king wouldn't want a bed with her.

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In the lack I watched on YouTube, the newlywed bride have to cry a lot before the eve of her wedding. 

>> I watched on YouTube a bride has to cry a lot before the eve of her wedding. 

It originates from the newlywed bride who would marry with her lover. But the king who allows their wedding asked the newlywed bride for a bed with him. 

>> It originates from a bride who will marry her lover but the king who allowed their wedding asked the bride to go to bed with him. 

She understandably cried so much that her face would be swollen. 

>> She understandably cried so much that her face was swollen. 

Also the king wouldn't want a bed with her.

>> So, the king didn't want to go to bed with her.

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