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What do you think would South Korea be like if it still has kings and queens?

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Wow, it's an interesting question. If there are still having them. I think the gap between rich and poor can happen in South Korea. Those who live well will continue to live well, and those who don't live well can't. It's like that now, too...

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Hi Elic!  

That is dangerous. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Wow, it's an interesting question. If there are still having them. 
>> Wow, that's an interesting question. 

I think the gap between rich and poor can happen in South Korea. 
>> If there were still kings and queens, there will be a gap between the rich and the poor here in South Korea. 

Those who live well will continue to live well, and those who don't live well can't. It's like that now, too..
>> Those who live well will continue to live well, and those who don't live well will suffer. That is what's happening right now actually. 
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