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My favorite Season

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What season do you love the most? Why?
Even I don't swim, I love the summar. I usually have the summar vacation for a week. During summar vacation, I visit the Ulleung Island. Ulleung Island is the hometown of my husband. Ulleung Island is far from Seoul. If you want to go Ulleung island, you must take a ship. It will take a 3 hours. Ulleung Island is popular for old people. Young people usually visit Jeju Island. Ulleung Island haven't a air port. But it is under the construction of air port. I think that if air port is complete, many people will visit the Ulleung island.

Please check the grammar!
Pohang is located in south and west of Korea. Pohang has beautiful beaches.
Memorial Day is a national holiday. The government has a ceremony.
South location of Korea is more warm than North location.
Busan has many delicacy. For example. Gukbap is famous delicacy in Busan. Gukbap is a soup which is made by pork and rick.

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Hi Miss Young!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

What season do you love the most? Why?

Even I don't swim, I love the summar. 
>> Even if I don't swim, I love summer. 
I usually have the summar vacation for a week. 
>> I usually take a summer vacation for a week. 
During summar vacation, I visit the Ulleung Island. 
>> During the summer vacation, I visit the Ulleung Island. 
Ulleung Island is the hometown of my husband. 
>> CORRECT!
Ulleung Island is far from Seoul. 
>> CORRECT!
If you want to go Ulleung island, you must take a ship. 
>> CORRECT!
It will take a 3 hours. 
>> It will take for about 3 hours. 
Ulleung Island is popular for old people. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Ulleung Island is popular among old people. 
Young people usually visit Jeju Island. 
>> CORRECT!
Ulleung Island haven't a air port.
>> Ulleung Island doesn't have an airport.
But it is under the construction of air port. 
>> But the airport is under construction. 
I think that if air port is complete, many people will visit the Ulleung island.
>> I think that if the airport is completely constructed, many people will visit the Ulleung island.
OR >> I think that if the airport is fully constructed, many people will visit the Ulleung island.


Please check the grammar!

Pohang is located in south and west of Korea. 
>> Pohang is located in the southwest part of Korea. 
Pohang has beautiful beaches.
>> CORRECT!
Memorial Day is a national holiday. 
>> CORRECT!
The government has a ceremony.
>> CORRECT!
South location of Korea is more warm than North location.
>> The southern part of Korea is warmer than the northern part.
Busan has many delicacy. 
>> Busan has many delicacies. 
For example. Gukbap is famous delicacy in Busan. 
>> For example, Gukbap is a famous delicacy in Busan. 
Gukbap is a soup which is made by pork and rick.
>> Gukbap is a soup which is made from pork and rick.
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