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What is your most dangerous experience in life?

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Not long after I joined the this company, after the plane landed, I had to direct it to the designated location, maybe it's because it's my first time, but I stopped a long way back from the line. So I think it was a dangerous experience because I was afraid I'd get fired. :)

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Hi !  

That is dangerous. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Not long after I joined the this company, after the plane landed, I had to direct it to the designated location, maybe it's because it's my first time, but I stopped a long way back from the line.
>>Not long after I joined the this company, I was supposed to direct a landing airplane to it's designated location. Maybe it's because it was my first time, but I stopped a long way back from the line. 

So I think it was a dangerous experience because I was afraid I'd get fired. :)
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