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I was surprised that so many underages drink strong alcohol.

I think underage drinking is related to diverse social phonomena.

They maybe not be interested in school life, not enough communicate with family .

They have reasons why they are addicted to drink.

One of reason is that school rules are loosen by wrong progressive education policy.

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Hello Ms. Lily!
Thank you for sharing a very "on-the-point" opinion.
In the Philippines, there is no strict implementation of restriction of alcohol to young people, they focus on their sales. (This is really a sad scenario) However, in my city, though young people can buy alcohol, they are not allowed to drink in the park, so they usually do their "drinking" session in their house if the parents are not around, or for some ven with the consent of their parents.
Lets talk more of this tomorrow :)
Have a great day!
Aki~
I was surprised that so many underage drinks strong alcohol.
>>> CORRECT!
I think underage drinking is related to diverse social phenomena.
>>> CORRECT!
They maybe not be interested in school life, not enough communicate with family .
>>>  They may not be interested in school life, and not have enough communication with their families.
They have reasons why they are addicted to drink.
>>> They have reasons why they are addicted to drinking.
One of reason is that school rules are loosen by wrong progressive education policy.
>>> One reason is that school rules are loosened by the wrong progressive education policy.
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