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Do you think that you should change your eating habits? Why or why not?

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I don't think that I should change my eating habits.
Because I'm eating well, and also I am eating many kinds of dishes that are beneficial to my body.
Even tough I hate some of vegetables, I am trying to eat those kinds of vegetables.
Because of these reasons, I don't think that I should change my eating habits.

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I don't think that I should change my eating habits.
>> CORRECT

Because I'm eating well, and also I am eating many kinds of dishes that are beneficial to my body.
>> It is because I am eating well and most of the food that I eat are beneficial to my body. 

Even tough I hate some of vegetables, I am trying to eat those kinds of vegetables.
> Even though I hate some vegetables, I still try to eat most of them. 

Because of these reasons, I don't think that I should change my eating habits.
>> CORRECT
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