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What is the best historical place there in South Korea and why?

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I would say the GyeongJu. It's because we always go to school field trip there at middle and high school. And there are many cultural properties and historic sites. The most famous ones are Bulguksa and Cheomseongdae.

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I would say the GyeongJu. 
>> I would say it's GyeongJu. 

It's because we always go to school field trip there at middle and high school. 
>> It's because we always go there during school field trips when I was in middle school and high school. 

And there are many cultural properties and historic sites. 
>> And there are many cultural properties and historical sites there. 

The most famous ones are Bulguksa and Cheomseongdae.
>> The famous  spots there are Bulguksa and Cheomseongdae.
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