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online or traditional education?

작성자: 유*영
2022-06-05 333

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Which is better for effective learning, online or traditional education?
If you don't have a mind to learn, learning traditional education is better for you. Because online education requires the attitude like a concentration. During online education, It's more easy to do the other behavior like doing game or texting messeage. So I think that learning traditional education is good way for element students. But, If you could control the attitude , learning online is more effective way. Online education remove the barrier of location. So, You could study in anywhere. In my case, I'm studying the English in online education. I meet the English teacher using skype app. Online education save the time because I don't need to go to the academic place.

I have a wedding ceremony on saturday. I will attend a wedding ceremony. I have 4 days vocation. Saturday, Sunday, Monday is a memorial day and Tuseday is a my annual vacation. I will visit the Pohang to see my parents in-law.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Young! 

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one. See you later!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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If you don't have a mind to learn, learning traditional education is better for you. 
>> Correct!
Because online education requires the attitude like a concentration. 
>> Correct!
During online education, It's more easy to do the other behavior like doing game or texting messeage. 
>> During online education, it's easier to do the other behavior like doing a game or texting messages. 
So I think that learning traditional education is good way for element students. 
>> So I think that learning traditional education is a good way for elementary students. 
But, If you could control the attitude , learning online is more effective way. 
>> But, If you could control the attitude, learning online is a more effective way. 
Online education remove the barrier of location. 
>> Online education removes the barrier of location.
So, You could study in anywhere. 
>> So, you could study  anywhere.
In my case, I'm studying the English in online education. 
>> Correct!
I meet the English teacher using skype app. 
>> I meet the English teacher using Skype app. 
Online education save the time because I don't need to go to the academic place.
>> Online education saves the time because I don't need to go to the academic place.

I have a wedding ceremony on saturday. 
>> I have a wedding ceremony on Saturday. 
I will attend a wedding ceremony. I have 4 days vocation. 
>> I will attend a wedding ceremony. I have 4 days vacation. 
Saturday, Sunday, Monday is a memorial day and Tuseday is a my annual vacation. 
>> Saturday, Sunday and Monday is a memorial day and Tuesday is a my annual vacation. 
I will visit the Pohang to see my parents in-law.
>> I will visit Pohang to see my parents in-law.

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