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The most interesting city to visit in our country is Busan Haeundae. Beacause Haeundae beach is very nice and every year,there is Haeundae sand festival. In sand festival we can meet many nice work.

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1. The most interesting city to visit in our country is Busan Haeundae. 
>> The most interesting city to visit in our country is Haeundae, Busan.

2. Beacause Haeundae beach is very nice and every year,there is Haeundae sand festival. 
>> Because Haeundae beach is very nice and there is a sand festival every year.

3. In sand festival we can meet many nice work
>> During the sand festival, we can meet many nice people.
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