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When I went to Hongkong, I ate a egg tart. Egg tart is very famous food in Hongkong so I really wanted to eat that. I felt that the tart is crispy and the egg sauce is sweet and mild appropriately, so I really surprised. Today I remembered my another traveling in Boracay! On the beach in Boracay, a woman braided my hair like that photos! It was unusual experience. When I went to HongKong, I was young girl so I think travel in Boracay was my best travel. Because there are beautiful scenery, beautiful beach, delicious food like duck meat, nice hotel and so on! I think best travel is that when I memory a travel I can think the travel is very nice and I want to go one more time.

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Hi Sally,
I like your picture. You're so pretty and cute. Your braided hair is nice and you look pretty. Keep smiling..:)
About traveling.. One of the most important benefits of traveling is the opportunity to build friendships and connections with people from all around the world. And exposing yourself to the unexpected when traveling often allows you to broaden your mind so much further. This includes culture, religion, food, and people. Having an open mind and being willing to dive head first into an experience will make travel experiences exceptional. " Enjoy traveling and Keep safe."
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When I went to Hongkong, I ate a egg tart. Egg tart is very famous food in Hongkong so I really wanted to eat that. 
>> When I went to Hongkong, I ate an egg tart. The egg tart is a very famous food in Hongkong so I really wanted to try and eat that. 
I felt that the tart is crispy and the egg sauce is sweet and mild appropriately, so I really surprised. 
>> I felt that the tart is crispy and the egg sauce is sweet and appropriately mild so I was really surprised. 
Today I remembered my another traveling in Boracay! On the beach in Boracay, a woman braided my hair like that photos! It was unusual experience. 
>> Today, I remembered another travel experience to Boracay! On the beach in Boracay, a woman braided my hair like that photo! It was an unusual experience for me. 
When I went to HongKong, I was young girl so I think travel in Boracay was my best travel.
>> When I went to Hong Kong, I was still a young girl at that time so I think traveling to Boracay was my best travel.
 Because there are beautiful scenery, beautiful beach, delicious food like duck meat, nice hotel and so on! 
>> Boracay is my best travel experience because there is beautiful scenery, a beautiful beach, delicious food like duck meat, a nice hotel and so on! 
I think best travel is that when I memory a travel I can think the travel is very nice and I want to go one more time.
>I think the best travel last forever and will remain in your memory because it was nice and enjoyable as well as you want to go back to that place again and again
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When I went to Hongkong, I ate a egg tart. Egg tart is very famous food in Hongkong so I really wanted to eat that. I felt that the tart is crispy and the egg sauce is sweet and mild appropriately, so I really surprised. Today I remembered my another traveling in Boracay! On the beach in Boracay, a woman braided my hair like that photos! It was unusual experience. When I went to HongKong, I was young girl so I think travel in Boracay was my best travel. Because there are beautiful scenery, beautiful beach, delicious food like duck meat, nice hotel and so on! I think best travel is that when I memory a travel I can think the travel is very nice and I want to go one more time.
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