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What kind of problems have you encountered?/ Bongeunsa Temple.

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What kind of conflicts/problems have you encountered these days? What did you do to solve it?
What I have encountered a problem is the lack of action. I want to make a electric book like PDF about investment. Why I make a electric book is organizing my investment and sharing good information the other people. But, it's hard to write. To make a action, I join the group gathered people who are want to make a electric book. The goal of Jun is making a electric book and studying English.
I'm trying to solve a acting problem by make a good environment.

- Today is election day. So, I didn't go to the work. It's a holiday. After voting, We visited the temple which is called Bongeunsa Temple. This temple is located in the center of Seoul. Many tourists visit the temple. That place is famous tourist attraction. I could find many foreigners easily. The character of temple is you can view of building and temple. Usually, temple is located in mountain.

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Hi, Young! 

Thank you for your effort in answering the question. 
~T. Roanne ^_^
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What I have encountered a problem is the lack of action. 
>> Correct! OR The problem that I have encountered was lack of action. 
I want to make a electric book like PDF about investment. 
>> I want to make an electronic book like a PDF about investment. 
Why I make a electric book is organizing my investment and sharing good information the other people. But, it's hard to write. 
>> Why I want to make an electronic book is organizing my investment and sharing good information the other people. But, it's hard to write. 
To make a action, I join the group gathered people who are want to make a electric book. 
>> To make an action, I joined the group gathered people who want to make an electronic book. 
The goal of Jun is making a electric book and studying English.
>> The goal for this month of June is making an electronic book and studying English.
I'm trying to solve a acting problem by make a good environment.
>> I'm trying to solve an acting problem by making a good environment.

- Today is election day. 
>> Correct! 
So, I didn't go to the work. 
>> Correct! 
It's a holiday. 
>> Correct! 
After voting, We visited the temple which is called Bongeunsa Temple. 
>> Correct! 
This temple is located in the center of Seoul. 
>> Correct! 
Many tourists visit the temple. 
>> Correct! 
That place is famous tourist attraction. 
>> That place is a famous tourist attraction. 
I could find many foreigners easily. 
>> Correct! 
The character of temple is you can view of building and temple. 
>> The character of the temple is you can view of building and temple. 
Usually, temple is located in mountain.
>> Usually, the temple is located in the mountain.
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