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How did the pandemic affect you the most?

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How did the pandemic affect you the most?

The pandemic has changed how we work and take classes.
The good things my lifestyle changed to better eating habits, getting healthier.
But the pandemic has triggered a mental health issue.
They are feeling depression and social isolation.

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Hi Monica!  

It really changed our lives drastically. :( 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

The pandemic has changed how we work and take classes.
>> CORRECT

The good things my lifestyle changed to better eating habits, getting healthier.
>> The good  thing that happened to my lifestyle is that my eating habits changed which made me healthier. 

But the pandemic has triggered a mental health issue.
>> But the pandemic triggered people's mental health issue. 

They are feeling depression and social isolation.
>>  They feel depression and social isolation.

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