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What is your opinion about ¡°edu-sitters¡±? Do you think they are helpful? Why or why not?

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I believe edu-sitters are not efficient for educating children. From the short-term perspective, these tutors can help and motivate children to achieve academic goals. However, the tutor would eventually eliminate self-reliance by making students depend too much on them. Indeed, achieving high grades is essential for many children because I learned that excellent results could allow more opportunities for future career paths. However, it would eventually decrease self-reliance, which is about building knowledge, understanding the concept, and establishing objectives on their own. There are limitations of assistance provided by these sitters, and most of them assist their students until they enter university, which is regarded as the utmost goal. I have come across many cases that the students who used to get good grades until high school do not accomplish the same goal in their university because they lost the way to empower and motivate themselves.

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Thank you for this Aciel!

I believe edu-sitters are not efficient for educating children. 
>>>  correct
From the short-term perspective, these tutors can help and motivate children to achieve academic goals. 
>>> OR: From a short-term perspective, these tutors can help and motivate children to achieve academic goals.    
However, the tutor would eventually eliminate self-reliance by making students depend too much on them. 
>>>  correct  
Indeed, achieving high grades is essential for many children because I learned that excellent results could allow more opportunities for future career paths. 
>>>  correct  
However, it would eventually decrease self-reliance, which is about building knowledge, understanding the concept, and establishing objectives on their own. 
>>>   correct 
There are limitations of assistance provided by these sitters, and most of them assist their students until they enter university, which is regarded as the utmost goal. 
>>>  correct  
I have come across many cases that the students who used to get good grades until high school do not accomplish the same goal in their university because they lost the way to empower and motivate themselves.
>>> OR:  I have come across many cases in which the students who used to get good grades until high school do not accomplish the same goal in their university because they lost the way to empower and motivate themselves. 
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