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What\'s your ideal fitness program? / What do you want to include in your ideal fitness program?

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2022-06-01 102

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I think every children under 16 have to learn any exercise such as boxing, swimming and taekwondo. If some children have a talent for sports, they can improve their talent And they can have basic fitness. And when another children grow, my ideal fitness program is that they go to the gym for 3 to 4 times a week and exercise for 1 hour to 1 hour and 30 minutes. I studied sports nutrition and sports science because I was interested in sports like weight training. I learned that weight training and working for over 2 hours is not good for our body. So 1 hour to 1 hour and 30 minutes is best time. And a balanced diet is very importent too. It is most importent to cut down on carbohydrates. And we don't have to skip a meal. Cutting down on carbohydrates are great help to various aspects such as diabetes and obesity.

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Hi Sally,
Starting a fitness program may be one of the best and most important things you can do for your health. Physical activity can reduce your risk of chronic disease, improve your balance and coordination, help you lose weight and even improve your sleep habits and self-esteem. But it doesn't have to be an overwhelming one. By planning carefully and pacing yourself, you can establish a healthy habit that lasts a lifetime. " Stay Healthy"   ~ Teacher QUENNY..:)

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I think every children under 16 have to learn any exercise such as boxing, swimming and taekwondo.
>> I think children under 16 years old have to learn any exercises such as boxing, swimming, and taekwondo.
 If some children have a talent for sports, they can improve their talent And they can have basic fitness. 
>>  If some children have a talent for sports, they can improve their talent and they can learn basic fitness too. 
And when another children grow, my ideal fitness program is that they go to the gym for 3 to 4 times a week and exercise for 1 hour to 1 hour and 30 minutes.
>> And when other children grow, my ideal fitness program for them is that they need to go to the gym 3 to 4 times a week and do some exercise for 1 hour to 1 and half hours. 
 I studied sports nutrition and sports science because I was interested in sports like weight training. 
>>  I studied sports nutrition and sports science because I was interested in sports like weight training and lifting. 
I learned that weight training and working for over 2 hours is not good for our body. 
>> I learned that weight training and working for over 2 hours is not good for our body and health. 
So 1 hour to 1 hour and 30 minutes is best time. 
>> So 1 hour to 1 and half hours is the best time to exercise. 
And a balanced diet is very importent too.
>> And a well-balanced diet is very essential too to stay healthy. 
 It is most importent to cut down on carbohydrates. And we don't have to skip a meal.
>>  It is most important to cut down on carbohydrates and we don't have to skip a meal.
 Cutting down on carbohydrates are great help to various aspects such as diabetes and obesity.
>> Cutting down on carbohydrates is a great and effective way to prevent various kinds of diseases such as diabetes and obesity.

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I think every children under 16 have to learn any exercise such as boxing, swimming and taekwondo. If some children have a talent for sports, they can improve their talent And they can have basic fitness. And when another children grow, my ideal fitness program is that they go to the gym for 3 to 4 times a week and exercise for 1 hour to 1 hour and 30 minutes. I studied sports nutrition and sports science because I was interested in sports like weight training. I learned that weight training and working for over 2 hours is not good for our body. So 1 hour to 1 hour and 30 minutes is best time. And a balanced diet is very importent too. It is most importent to cut down on carbohydrates. And we don't have to skip a meal. Cutting down on carbohydrates are great help to various aspects such as diabetes and obesity.
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