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What do you think is the biggest problem your country is facing? Explain your answer.

It is employment difficulty. There are a lot of young people who can't get a job after graduation. So I'm worried about employment. That's why I have to study hard.

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Hi Won! 
 
This is a serious problem that's why there are many people who consider going to another country instead to work. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

It is employment difficulty. 
>> I think the biggest problem in our country is employment. 

There are a lot of young people who can't get a job after graduation. 
>> CORRECT

So I'm worried about employment. 
>> I'm worried about this that's why I have to study hard. 

That's why I have to study hard.
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