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What do you think is the most challenging part about raising a dog?

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In my perspective, the most challenging part about raising a dog would be the constant dedication. Not to mention the financial expenditure because everything is expensive in South Korea related to dogs; I need to show constant effort because pets are also part of the family. When I first started raising a dog, I thought it would grow by itself if I fed it correctly. After having my dog for nearly ten years, I learned that there is more than feeding and strolling. Raising a dog is like having a child of my own who cannot express themselves verbally. Therefore, I must ensure whether it has some physical or emotional change that can negatively impact its health. When my dog was first diagnosed with chronic pancreatitis, no one noticed it until it became severe. Since then, I have ensured to check my dog's health twice a day. Consequently, I believe one should start raising a dog when they are prepared.

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Thank you Aciel! I can completely relate to this since I am also raising a dog. I only had her for few months and I can already feel the big responsibility.

In my perspective, the most challenging part about raising a dog would be the constant dedication. 
>>> correct    
Not to mention the financial expenditure because everything is expensive in South Korea related to dogs; I need to show constant effort because pets are also part of the family. 
>>>  correct    
When I first started raising a dog, I thought it would grow by itself if I fed it correctly. 
>>>  correct    
After having my dog for nearly ten years, I learned that there is more than feeding and strolling. 
>>> OR: After having my dog for nearly ten years, I learned that there is more to it than just feeding and strolling.    
Raising a dog is like having a child of my own who cannot express themselves verbally. 
>>> correct  
Therefore, I must ensure whether it has some physical or emotional change that can negatively impact its health. 
>>> correct   
When my dog was first diagnosed with chronic pancreatitis, no one noticed it until it became severe. 
>>> correct   
Since then, I have ensured to check my dog's health twice a day. 
>>> correct   
Consequently, I believe one should start raising a dog when they are prepared.
>>>  correct  


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