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What festivals or celebrations does your country have during the changing of the seasons? Which one is your favorite and why?

My favorite festival is Waterbomb. At Waterbomb, every plays in the water. And also they shoot a water gun to other people. But I haven't been to the festival. I just watched it on Youtube. So If I have a chance to go there, I definitely go there.

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Hi Won! 
 
That sound so fun! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My favorite festival is Waterbomb.
>> My favorite festival is the Waterbomb Festival. 

At Waterbomb, every plays in the water. 
>> During the Waterbomb Festival, we do activities in the water. 

And also they shoot a water gun to other people. 
>> Also, we shoot water using a water gun to other people. 

But I haven't been to the festival. 
>> But I haven't been to this festival. 

I just watched it on Youtube. 
>> I just watched it on YouTube

So If I have a chance to go there, I definitely go there.
>> So If I have a chance to go there, I will definitely go there.

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