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Q:In your culture, is it polite to be straightforward and direct when you talk to someone?
A:Being straightforward and direct is not that good in our culture.
Actually, being honest is good but being too direct is not good because human sometimes need to be emotional.
So, if someone is too direct, then he or she can seem cold.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Being straightforward and direct is not that good in our culture.

>> CORRECT!
Actually, being honest is good but being too direct is not good because human sometimes need to be emotional.

>> Actually, being honest is good but being too direct is not good because humans sometimes need to be emotional.
So, if someone is too direct, then he or she can seem cold.

>> CORRECT!

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