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What festivals or celebrations does your country have during the changing of the seasons?

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Of course, We can enjoy the cherry blossom during spring season. During summer season, the lock music festivals will be held and we usually go to the beach. And there is Chuseok in fall. Trout and smelt festivals are famous in winter.

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Hi Elic! 
 
Those sound like great festivals!

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Of course, We can enjoy the cherry blossom during spring season. 
>> Of course, we can enjoy the cherry blossoms during the spring season. 

During summer season, the lock music festivals will be held and we usually go to the beach. 
>> During the summer season, the Lock Music festivals will be held and we usually go to the beach. 

And there is Chuseok in fall. 
>> And there is Chuseok during the fall. 

Trout and smelt festivals are famous in winter.
>> The Trout and Smelt festivals are  famous during the winter. 
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