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What do you think will happen if we lived in a world without animals? Explain your answer.

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I don't know about the other people whether they will say that it is good or bad, but for me, it will be terrible.
If we need to live without the animals, that means that we are not able to eat some meats.
But my favorite dishes are all made from the meats.
So for me, I think it is impossible to live without the animals.

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Hi John! 
 
They play a very important role in our lives. I think we can't survive without them. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't know about the other people whether they will say that it is good or bad, but for me, it will be terrible.
>> COI don't know about the other people whether they will say that it is good or bad, but for me it will be terrible.

If we need to live without the animals, that means that we are not able to eat some meats.
>> If we need to live without the animals, that means that we will not be able to eat meat. 

But my favorite dishes are all made from the meats.
>> 
But all my favorite dishes have meat in it. 

So for me, I think it is impossible to live without the animals.
>> CORRECT

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