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Korea traffic jam

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2022-05-24 395

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Traffic jam in Korea is famous all over the world.
And there are too many cars owned by one person.
That is the most important problem.
We should have some project and capaign.

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Hi Ann! 

That's true. There are traffic jams because of too much cars on the road. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Traffic jam in Korea is famous all over the world.
>> The traffic jam in South Korea is known all over the world. 

And there are too many cars owned by one person.
>> There are some people who own too many cars. 

That is the most important problem.
>> That is the biggest problem. 

We should have some project and capaign
>> We should have some project or campaign about this. 

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