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[Homework] Q. What modern gadget could you not live without?

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I strongly assure that most of people including me would say a smartphone as the reply of this question. In my case, my smartphone is always within being grabbed distance even while I fall asleep.

Since I live with my smartphone 24/7, it does a variety of tasks for me everyday. Its first task is to wake me up in the morning. I¡¯m a kind of a person who can¡¯t hear an alarm sound, so it make a sound loudly every 5 minutes over 10 times. And then, it shows me a daily news, advertisements and job openings which are helpful to me twice a day, 9:30am and 6pm. Also, it lets me not forget my schedules or other important things, and it plays my type of playlist at the same time. Furthermore, I can communicate with my family, friends and even my favorite artist through an app.

There are lots of things I can do by my smartphone as much as I can¡¯t count all of it. It is not too much to say that my smartphone makes my life completely. It is very essential for living in this modern society.

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Good work, Sam! I am even prouder than you make a long and meaningful answer.-Faith-
I strongly assure that most of people including me would say a smartphone as the reply of this question. 
>> I strongly assure that most of the people including me would say a smartphone as a reply to this question. 
In my case, my smartphone is always within being grabbed distance even while I fall asleep.
>> In my case, my smartphone is always within striking distance even when I sleep.
Since I live with my smartphone 24/7, it does a variety of tasks for me everyday. 
>> Since I live with my smartphone 24/7, it does a variety of tasks for me every day. 
Its first task is to wake me up in the morning. 
>> CORRECT
I¡¯m a kind of a person who can¡¯t hear an alarm sound, so it make a sound loudly every 5 minutes over 10 times. 
>> I¡¯m a kind of a person who can¡¯t hear an alarm sound right away, so it makes a sound loudly every 5 minutes over 10 times. 
And then, it shows me a daily news, advertisements and job openings which are helpful to me twice a day, 9:30am and 6pm. 
>> And then, it shows me daily news, advertisements and job openings which are helpful to me twice a day at 9:30am and 6pm.
Also, it lets me not forget my schedules or other important things, and it plays my type of playlist at the same time.
>> Also, it lets me not forget my schedules or other important things and it plays my type of playlist at the same time.
Furthermore, I can communicate with my family, friends and even my favorite artist through an app.
>> CORRECT
OR In addition, we can get in touch with my family, friends and even my favorite artist through an app.
There are lots of things I can do by my smartphone as much as I can¡¯t count all of it. 
>> CORRECT
It is not too much to say that my smartphone makes my life completely. 
>> It is not too much to say that my smartphone makes my life complete.
It is very essential for living in this modern society.
>> CORRECT
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