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What can you say about students hiring someone to do their homework? Is this acceptable? Why or why

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First of all, we have to have a disscussion if it is benificial for students. Many believe that it provide additional advantages to improve the discipline of practice, in other hands, it make students sedentary for a long time at home. Both prespective are right but I think that it helps a lot to develop one's learnig abilities and construct good habit. In addition, students can learn how to manage their time. They might make a plan for their homework to do on time and then they can use their free time. Lastly, it can help students have a conversation with their parents because they might need help from their parents due to the difficulties of questions. It allows everyone to get to know each other better, and parents can see where their children are struggling. In the same sense, parents can also see where their children are excelling. So, I don't agree to hire someone to do homework instead, because it's advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


First of all, we have to have a disscussion if it is benificial for students. 
>> First of all, we have to have a discussion if it is beneficial for students. 
Many believe that it provide additional advantages to improve the discipline of practice, in other hands, it make students sedentary for a long time at home. 
>> Many believe that it provides additional advantages to improve the discipline of practice, on the other hand, it makes students sedentary for a long time at home. 
Both prespective are right but I think that it helps a lot to develop one's learnig abilities and construct good habit. 
>> Both prespectives are right but I think that it helps a lot to develop one's learning abilities and construct good habits. 
In addition, students can learn how to manage their time. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In addition, students learn the value of time management.
They might make a plan for their homework to do on time and then they can use their free time.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> They might make a plan for their homework to do on time and then they can use their time freely.
 Lastly, it can help students have a conversation with their parents because they might need help from their parents due to the difficulties of questions. 
>> CORRECT!
It allows everyone to get to know each other better, and parents can see where their children are struggling. 
>> CORRECT!
In the same sense, parents can also see where their children are excelling. 
>> CORRECT!
So, I don't agree to hire someone to do homework instead, because it's advantages outweigh disadvantages.
>> CORRECT!
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