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Are you worried about your future? Why or why not?

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If I say that I don't worry about my future, then it will be a big lie.
But I don't get too mush stress by worrying my future.
Because I am doing well, and if I do so, then I will succeed my goals.
I know this, so I am not worrying too much about my future.
And I believe that there will be a happiness in my future.

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Hi John! 

You have a very positive mindset. Very good. 
 
Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

If I say that I don't worry about my future, then it will be a big lie.
>> CORRECT

But I don't get too mush stress by worrying my future.
>> But I don't get too much stress from worrying to much. 

Because I am doing well, and if I do so, then I will succeed my goals.
>> So far I am doing well, and if I continue to do so, I will succeed in my goals. 

I know this, so I am not worrying too much about my future.
>> CORRECT

And I believe that there will be a happiness in my future.
>> And I believe that there will be happiness in my future.

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