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Are you worried about your future? Why or why not?

Yes I am. Because I don't know what I will do in the future. And I don't know what I like to do. But It is clear that if I study hard, I can do anything. So I'm going to continue studying hard, and if I like something to do, I will do everything for it.

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Hi Won! 

That is a very positive mindset. Good job! 
 
Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

Yes I am. Because I don't know what I will do in the future. 
>> Yes, I am because I don't know what I will do in the future. 

And I don't know what I like to do. 
>>I also don't know what I like to do. 

But It is clear that if I study hard, I can do anything.
>> But it is clear that if I study, I can do anything so I am going to continue studying hard. 

 So I'm going to continue studying hard, and if I like something to do, I will do everything for it.
>> If I find out eventually what I like to do, I will do everything for it. 

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