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What is the most memorable birthday you've ever had? Explain your answer.

When I was a child, I invited a lot of my friends to my home during my birthday. And I ate some delicious food and enjoyed with them. They gave me some presents and I really liked it. One day, one of them gave me a letter. And I can't forget it.

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Hi Won! 

Wow, that's very thoughtful of your friend. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

When I was a child, I invited a lot of my friends to my home during my birthday. 
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And I ate some delicious food and enjoyed with them. 
>>We usually eat some delicious food and enjoy our time together. 

They gave me some presents and I really liked it. 
>> They usually give me some presents and I really liked it. 

One day, one of them gave me a letter. And I can't forget it.
>> One day, one of them gave me a letter and I couldn't forget it ever since. 


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