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Which part of your environment would you like to change the most at this time if possible?

If there's something that I want to change, it would be the personalities of some of my colleagues who I should meet every day whether l like or not. However, I do know that changing someone's personalities is impossible at the age of over 40's. Thus, changing myself first is a lot easier way to make someone else change.

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Hi, U Seung! 

That is indeed true! It's not going to be easy to change other people's personalities. The best thing you can do is to start yourself the change that you would like others to have, so they follow eventually. 

Thank you for sharing!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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If there's something that I want to change, it would be the personalities of some of my colleagues who I should meet every day whether l like or not.
>> Correct! 
However, I do know that changing someone's personalities is impossible at the age of over 40's. 
>> However, I do know that changing someone's personalities are impossible at the age of over 40's.
Thus, changing myself first is a lot easier way to make someone else change.
>> Correct! 
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