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What do you think is the hardest job in the world? Explain your answer.

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I know that there are a lot of harder jobs than this, but I think an elementary school teacher is very hard job.
I didn't remember how I was able to understand my study, but I understood a lot of things in my elementary school.
So I know a lot of things, but it is hard to explain and make elementary school students to understand the study.
But my elementary school teachers made us to understand those things.
So I think elementary school teachers are really brilliant and it is really hard job

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Hi John! 

Yes, you really need to have very long patience to be an elementary school student. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I know that there are a lot of harder jobs than this, but I think an elementary school teacher is very hard job.
>> I know that there are a lot of harder jobs than this, but I think being an elementary school teacher is very hard job.

I didn't remember how I was able to understand my study, but I understood a lot of things in my elementary school.
>> CORRECT

So I know a lot of things, but it is hard to explain and make elementary school students to understand the study.
>> So I know a lot of things, but it is hard to explain and make elementary school students understand different lessons. 

But my elementary school teachers made us to understand those things.
But my elementary school teachers made us understand those things.

So I think elementary school teachers are really brilliant and it is really hard job. 
>> CORRECT
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