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Should poor people be punished for stealing if they are stealing to feed their families?

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Of course, Hong Gildong who is a traditional Korean character, and Jean Valjean in the movie Les Misérables, stole to do good, but I think it is right to be punished. There's no reason why there are rules and laws if you don't get punished, no matter how much you do for your family or for good. And I think it's most important to figure out why they could only go so far.

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Hi Elic! 

That's true. That is what the law is for, to have everything balanced. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

Of course, Hong Gildong who is a traditional Korean character, and Jean Valjean in the movie Les Misérables, stole to do good, but I think it is right to be punished. 
>> Of course, they should be punished. Hong Gildong, who is a traditional Korean character, and Jean Valjean, in the movie Les Miserables, stole to do good, but I think it is right to be punished. 

There's no reason why there are rules and laws if you don't get punished, no matter how much you do for your family or for good. 
>> There's no reason why there are rules and laws if you don't get punished, no matter how much you do for your family or for good. 

And I think it's most important to figure out why they could only go so far.
>> And I think that it's most important to figure out why they could only go so far.

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