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What are the things that usually annoy you? Explain your answer.

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In my classroom, there are various kinds of students.
I don't curse him but in my classroom, there is a student who always messes up the classes.
I feel like he is younger than us, and also he acts and speaks like a child.
Because of that, my classmates hate them and even some of them curse him.
And I am always annoyed by him, but actually I don't curse him.
Because I think cursing somebody is really cowardly, and also I don't like to curse somebody.

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Hi John! 

Yes, choose to be kind always. Let's hope that your classmate will change already. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

In my classroom, there are various kinds of students.
>> CORRECT

I don't curse him but in my classroom, there is a student who always messes up the classes.
>> I don't curse want to curse him but in my classroom, there is a student who always messes up the classes.

I feel like he is younger than us, and also he acts and speaks like a child.
>> I feel like he is younger than us, and he acts and speaks like a child. 

Because of that, my classmates hate them and even some of them curse him.
>> Because of that, my classmates hate him and some curse him. 

And I am always annoyed by him, but actually I don't curse him.
>> I am always annoyed by him but not to the point that I will curse him, 

Because I think cursing somebody is really cowardly, and also I don't like to curse somebody.
>> Because I think cursing somebody is a cowardly thing to do and also I don't like to curse other people. 

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