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How was your weekend? What did you do?

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Since a few days ago, I have been posting translated English on Facebook, Instagram, and my personal blog.
This is what I shared my weekend routine with yesterday.
I am posting every day on my way home from work.
Although it is a translation, I was able to feel that it was very helpful after reading and practicing over and over again.

Anyway, I share with you. Please advise on my new attempt.

Dreaming of a handyman (Sat, Sun, 5.8)~~
I happily completed all personal missions for the 4 days of the holiday.
1. Table Tennis Dawn Personal Training -Growth!
2. Pretty memories with my parents, my father-in-law, my mother-in-law, and my wife and sons - Happiness!
3. Meeting with foreign friends Like going to a picnic together in May -Excited!
I am somewhat of a plan man? As I dream, plan, and put into practice, I seem to feel a sense of happiness in the process whether I achieve it or not.
I hope you are always happy, my friend.~~

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Hello Elliot!

I'm glad that you've had a lovely and productive weekend. I on the other hand has been experiencing migraine since Sunday until now.

I am impressed that you post translated content on your blog and socials. That is indeed a great way to practice! You also accomplished some really nice personal missions mostly beneficial to your mental, physical, and emotional well-being. Good for you!

For the corrections, there aren't much! For the first one, we need to add "about" because you only shared the stories or happenings of the weekend, not the actual weekend.  For the second correction, always indicate the verb form, so I added "will" and you also forgot the pronoun "it" or you can also use "them". For the third one, it was okay, if it is in a list, but as a sentence, we need to add a verb there to make the sentence idea complete. Lastly, you capitalized the L in "like" which was in the middle of the sentence.

All in all, I think it was great! Thank you again for sharing so much! I'm sorry for the probable delay in the corrections, I was sick and was unable to do it.

Best regards,
-Teacher Violet.
Since a few days ago, I have been posting translated English on Facebook, Instagram, and my personal blog.
>> CORRECT!

This is what I shared my weekend routine with yesterday.
>> This is what I shared about my weekend routine yesterday.

I am posting every day on my way home from work.
>> CORRECT!

Although it is a translation, I was able to feel that it was very helpful after reading and practicing over and over again.
>> CORRECT!

Anyway, I share with you. Please advise on my new attempt.
>> Anyway, I will share it with you. Please advise on my new attempt.

Dreaming of a handyman (Sat, Sun, 5.8)~~
>> CORRECT!

I happily completed all personal missions for the 4 days of the holiday.
>> CORRECT!

1. Table Tennis Dawn Personal Training -Growth!
>> CORRECT!

2. Pretty memories with my parents, my father-in-law, my mother-in-law, and my wife and sons - Happiness!
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Make pretty memories with my parents, father-in-law, mother-in-law, and wife and sons - Happiness!

3. Meeting with foreign friends Like going to a picnic together in May -Excited!
>> 3. Meeting with foreign friends like going to a picnic together in May -Excited! (capital L in 'like')

I am somewhat of a plan man? 
>> CORRECT!

As I dream, plan, and put into practice, I seem to feel a sense of happiness in the process whether I achieve it or not.
>> CORRECT!

I hope you are always happy, my friend.~~
>> CORRECT! (You too!)


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