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5/6 writing homework is here ^^

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I attached the file because the writing is long ^^
and I write here because I will write on that day which the class's day from May 9. ^^ can you understand me?

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Hi! Thank you for submitting your homework to me, Arissa.
No worries that assignment you will be submitting today, May 9th, will be posted for May 9th too.

I had read your answer and corrected it below. 

I was so surprised about your experience. It must have been very difficult. I'm glad that you chose to think optimistically. I hope that you will find a better school which would value your talent and sincerity. I also wish that you will find members that will be sincere and kind. 

PS: I'm sending the modified word document file on Skype too. ^^

~ Teacher Gina

What is your opinion about being optimistic and pessimistic? (5/6 writing)

 

I prefer being optimistic then pessimistic.

>> I prefer being optimistic than pessimistic.

We face lots of tough situations in our lives.

If we think it pessimistically, we cannot go next step.

>> If we think about it pessimistically, we cannot go to the next step.

Sometimes, we upset and it tends to be easy to endure suffer staying in sorrow and pessimism when we under the bad situation.

>> Sometimes, we feel upset and it tends to be easy to endure the suffering by staying in sorrow and pessimism when we are under a bad situation.

However, it makes us getting harder and harder.

>> However, it makes it harder and harder for us.

On the other hand, if we think optimistically, we can meet another good chances.

>> On the other hand, if we think optimistically, we can meet another good chance.

>> Or: On the other hand, if we think optimistically, we can meet other good chances.

Actually, I have an experience. Someone who was one of my book club members betraied me 2 weeks ago.

>> Someone, who was one of my book club members, betrayed me two weeks ago.

She blamed me at the formal meeting in school about my way of managing book club.

>> She blamed me at the formal meeting in school for my way of managing the book club.

The point was how gather members.

>> The point was how to gather members.

I managed book club for 7 years and she also was a member.

>> I managed the book club for 7 years and she also was a member.

 

My book club was very popular through teachers for years but time gose by I felt difficulties.

>> My book club was very popular with teachers for years but as time goes by, I felt difficulties.

The reason was some member¡¯s low attendance rate and no show. So I told members about it and I decided I will accept new members through recommandations of old members.

All agreed my opinion and I did in that way this year.

>> All agreed with my opinion and I did it that way this year.

However she blamed me about that way in formal meeting which my principal and vice-principal are in.

>> However, she blamed me about that way in the formal meeting which my principal and vice-principal were in.

Actually it happened after I found her corruption. So I had to apologized to all teachers about the way of gathering members even though it is not illigal.

>> So I had to apologize to all the teachers about the way of gathering members even though it is not illegal.

I was so angry and upset and I got stressed. I decided to leave this school next year. I don¡¯t want to be weakened. I don¡¯t want to stay here. I worked here for 8 years already.

So I think it is a sign to leave to the new place and spread my abilities to other school where I can work without stress.

>> So I think it is a sign to leave for a new place and spread my abilities to another school where I can work without stress.

As a result, I can think optimistically against the ridiculous situation.

 

 

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