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HOMEWORK:
What is your favorite sports? Answer in a few sentences.

I'm not really interested in sports excluding the Olympic season. I mainly watched games played by Korean players. During the Olympic season, we cheered our players as one. I think that sports give us passion and motivation through their stories.

There are some errors in my feedback number 2 and 8. Could you check please?

Have a wonderful weekend Donna. I'm so exited and happy to the next three months of class. Thank you!

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Hi there, Hae Ju!

Indeed, the Olympics is a spectacle for all of the countries around the world who send their athletes in this very competitive global sports event. Even if you are not into sports, watching it makes you feel like you have a responsibility to watch your own delegation compete.

Anyway, your sentences are very good and your ideas are very well organized. Congratulations for doing a great job on this homework! Thank you very  much as well for editing and going over your sentences last Friday. Below are the suggestions. In addition, they have been corrected on your own page.

I look forward to a fun and very meaningful learning with you for the next quarter of a year!

See you soon! 

-T. Donna =)

I'm not really interested in sports excluding the Olympic season. 
>> Correct!

I mainly watched games played by Korean players. 
>> Correct!

During the Olympic season, we cheered our players as one. 
>> During the Olympic season, we cheered for our players as one. 

I think that sports give us passion and motivation through their stories.
>> Correct!

There are some errors in my feedback number 2 and 8. Could you check please?
>> There are some errors in my feedback numbers 2 and 8. Could you check them please?

***2. I ate dinner with my family, we ate the samgyupsal.
>> I ate dinner with my family, we ate samgyupsal.

***8. When I'm fully stressed out, I feel my body, I'm not wiling to do.
>> When I'm fully stressed out, I feel that my body is not willing to do anything.

Have a wonderful weekend Donna. 
>> Correct!

I'm so exited and happy to the next three months of class. 
>> I'm so excited and happy for the next three months of class. 

Thank you!
>> Correct!
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