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For you, do you prefer the idea of extended or nuclear families?

작성자: 오*빈
2022-05-06 147

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Actually, nowadays there are not many extended families. And my family is also nuclear families. But if I’m a member of extended families, I think it’s more likely to be fun with a lot of family members.
Nevertheless, I’m prefer nuclear families.
That’s because if there are many family members, I think it’s not easy to make a decision for important family agendas. There will be many opinions, and finding a compromise will be not easy. I think some of family members cannot like the decision. So the boss’s role in the extended families would more important than in nuclear families.
Also there will be some minor conflicts. In my friend’s case who has extended families, she said that she usually has conflicts due to TV channel or snacks with their family members. For example, she want to watch running man on Sunday, but other family members don’t want to watch it.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Elena!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Actually, nowadays there are not many extended families. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There are only a few extended families these days.
And my family is also nuclear families. 
>> My family belongs to a nuclear family. 
But if I’m a member of extended families, I think it’s more likely to be fun with a lot of family 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If I belong to an extended family, I think it's more likely to be fun with a lot of family members.
Nevertheless, I’m prefer nuclear families.
>> Nevertheless, I prefer nuclear families.
OR >> Nevertheless, I prefer to have a nuclear family.
That’s because if there are many family members, I think it’s not easy to make a decision for important family agendas. 
>> CORRECT!
There will be many opinions, and finding a compromise will be not easy. 
>> There will be many opinions, and finding a compromise will not be easy. 
OR >> There will be many opinions, and finding a compromise will never be easy. 
I think some of family members cannot like the decision. 
>> I think some family members would not like the decision. 
OR >>  I think some family members would disagree with that decision.
So the boss’s role in the extended families would more important than in nuclear families.
>> So the boss’ role in the extended families would be more important than in nuclear families.
Also there will be some minor conflicts. 
>> CORRECT!
In my friend’s case who has extended families, she said that she usually has conflicts due to TV channel or snacks with their family members. 
>> In my friend’s case who belongs to an extended family, she said that she usually has conflicts with other members due to TV channel or snacks with their family members. 
For example, she want to watch running man on Sunday, but other family members don’t want to watch it.
>> For example, she wants to watch Running Man on Sunday, but other family members don’t want to watch it.
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