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It is that disturbing me when I'm doing something. Even though they are close friends of mine, they shouldn't do that.

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Hi Kane! 

That is irritating. It makes us loose our focus. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

It is that disturbing me when I'm doing something. 
>> The thing that iritates me the most is when someone disturbs me when I am doing something. 

Even though they are close friends of mine, they shouldn't do that.
>> Even if that person is a close friend of mine, they still shouldn't do it. 
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