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Which one do you think is better, living with relatives or living alone?

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Sometimes, I want to be alone for thinking, clearing my head and when resting comfortably. But It's better living with relatives. I like to talk and listen with someone. And I think people don't get depressed when they talk with other people.

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Hi Elic! 

It's a very tough choice. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

Sometimes, I want to be alone for thinking, clearing my head and when resting comfortably. 
>> Sometimes, I want to be alone to think, clear my head and rest comfortably. 

But It's better living with relatives. 
>> But it's better living with relatives. 

I like to talk and listen with someone.
>> CORRECT

And I think people don't get depressed when they talk with other people.
>> CORRECT

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